tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-56628396486473925352012-02-16T20:21:12.097-07:00Meggy Whttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15142716130545514532noreply@blogger.comBlogger11100tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5662839648647392535.post-52513091894698954022008-10-10T09:32:00.000-06:002008-10-10T09:36:37.277-06:00<span style="font-family: georgia;">So, I'm <span style="color: rgb(0, 0, 102);">tryin</span> to start one of these again. Its mostly gonna be for my poetry and short stories though. I'd love any feedback anyone can give me, I love constructive criticism!</span><br /><br /><span style="font-family: georgia;">With that said, here's <span style="color: rgb(153, 0, 0);">poem number 1</span>!!</span><br /><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 200%; font-family: georgia;"><br /><span style="color: rgb(204, 0, 0);">“The Fire in my Eyes”</span><o:p style="color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"></o:p></span> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Colors pass the back of eyelids<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">in a whirlwind of sparks; red<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">and orange and yellow. They light<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"><o:p> </o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">up my night. My perpetual darkness.<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">But is there really darkness, or<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">only that which I cannot see?<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"><o:p> </o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">As I let my preconceived notions<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">go, my sight expands. I let<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">myself see what is connected to<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"><o:p> </o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">the flame colors. Brown trunks attached<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">to dirt covered with dead grass.<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">I smell autumn in the brisk<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"><o:p> </o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">air that passes my upturned face.<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">The same breeze lifts goose bumps<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">on my bare arms. Sweet release!<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"><o:p> </o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">I throw my hands to the<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">sky! And spin till I’m sick.<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">God, oh god! All the feelings…<o:p></o:p></span></p> <p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height: 115%; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);"><span style="font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"><o:p> </o:p></span></p> <span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: georgia; color: rgb(204, 0, 0);">Freed. The fire in my eyes.</span><div class="blogger-post-footer"><img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/5662839648647392535-5251309189469895402?l=meganelise1.blogspot.com' alt='' /></div>Meggy Whttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15142716130545514532noreply@blogger.com0