Friday, October 10

Poem for a penny...

So, I'm tryin to start one of these again. Its mostly gonna be for my poetry and short stories though. I'd love any feedback anyone can give me, I love constructive criticism!

With that said, here's poem number 1!!

“The Fire in my Eyes”

Colors pass the back of eyelids

in a whirlwind of sparks; red

and orange and yellow. They light

up my night. My perpetual darkness.

But is there really darkness, or

only that which I cannot see?

As I let my preconceived notions

go, my sight expands. I let

myself see what is connected to

the flame colors. Brown trunks attached

to dirt covered with dead grass.

I smell autumn in the brisk

air that passes my upturned face.

The same breeze lifts goose bumps

on my bare arms. Sweet release!

I throw my hands to the

sky! And spin till I’m sick.

God, oh god! All the feelings…

Freed. The fire in my eyes.